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Watch today’s re-write, and check out the before and after emails below.
Before:
Subject line: We’ve landed more clients. Is Interseller next?
Hi Kristina,
We’ve brought on a few more clients, including COMPANY. Based on the companies that we have signed up, I believe that this will be worth your time.
Feel free to choose a meeting time at your convenience.
Looking forward to hearing from you,
[Signature Block]
Will’s Rewrite
Subject line: Channel Reports
Hi Kristina,
I was running a few competitive Google searches. Also took a look at your FB ads page. Looks like the team is investing across channels.
Given you’re hiring a marketing analyst, is this because cross channel measurement is eating time?
Will
Will Allred
Sales @ COMPANY
No Code Marketing Dashboards to Bring it all Together
companywebsite.com
Kristina’s Rewrite
Subject line: paid campaigns
Kristina,
From my research, it doesn’t look like Interseller has invested much in paid marketing campaigns.
^ Is this something that’s in the works?
COMPANY’s platform helps companies like COMPANY manage paid channel performance, ad spend, and marketing data sources in one place.
Assuming you’re diving more into paid strategy in the upcoming months – worth a chat?
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